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A Science Fiction story from the perspective of a dying AI.

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  • alexisrbaker
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    • 8 年 之前

    Great idea. I enjoyed the read, I am a little confused though, at the beginning of the story I get the sense that the AI is looking back at what happened, but at the end of the story it's present time. Dialogue is an issue, and while I understand the reason for that, perhaps you could give voices to the warning signals.

    • 8 年 之前
    1. piloxred
      piloxred
      • 8 年 之前

      Thank you for your feedback! Honestly, I hadn't thought to use the warnings as dialogue. Would you mind if I made changes and resubmitted this piece? (Sorry, I don't know if there are rules against that. Just making sure.)

      • 8 年 之前
  • rcruzucf
    rcruzucf
    • 8 年 之前

    Great story. Your view point is unique, And nice touch with the decaying/melting words at the end.

    • 8 年 之前
  • rcruzucf
    rcruzucf
    • 8 年 之前

    Great story. Your view point is unique, And nice touch with the decaying/melting words at the end.

    • 8 年 之前