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  Felalfians

  • 3 年 之前

  could you please extend the time? I try to submit mine but already too late

  • 3 年 之前
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     Felalfians

     • 3 年 之前

     Laura and I took turn in taking pictures of each other. I, however, was not really satisfied with the result. I thought it was not everyday having a chance to stand in front of the idyllic building. With full of enthusiasm, I pleaded “Can you please take just a couple more? It is not every day we can get here!” Without any hesitation, Laura said yes. As Laura had agreed to my request, I started to get fired up. I put my purse down next to hers on the ground. It was right next to where she was standing. Jump! Smile! Cheese! I tried many best poses as I could. Laura moves closes and closer to me, trying to catch the best angle. I was so happy thinking about the results, knowing Laura had put great efforts in it. Laura too, she was eager to catch my photo We were absorbed and excited about taking the best picture, until we forgot about something, OUR PURSE!!!

     • 3 年 之前
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     Felalfians

     • 3 年 之前

     In the midst of excitement, Laura started to realize that there was something wrong.
     She suddenly felt a swift of air. She looked back, abruptly became panic and yelled “Our Purse!”. The purses were supposed to be a couple a feet away from where she stood. However, they were nowhere to be found. OUR PURSES HAD ALREADY GONE!
     
     Panic! Confused! Suddenly a dread filled my body as I was trying to process what just happened. It was a feeling of great enthusiasm that turned into unexpected great terror. A million thoughts flooded my head. How did this happen? How came neither of us see it? The only thing we had was Laura’s phone that she used to take my picture. I feel the Stupidest person at that time! I was so angry with myself.

     • 3 年 之前
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  vksafa

  • 3 年 之前

  Kindly review my entry #59.

  • 3 年 之前
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  uf498968

  • 3 年 之前

  Dear Contest holder, your feedback is highly appreciated on #53 . When you get 4 star or below ratings, it usually means the lack of an important element like grammar, punctuation, flow, presentation, imagery, font and myriad others. Is that it? Will you pin point my error so that I can ease it up?

  • 3 年 之前
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  uf498968

  • 3 年 之前

  Still on time, right? Thank God. So, my work is displayed in #53 .Two of my most favoured skills are Story Telling and Copywriting. Loved the work. Loved the competition. Humbly awaiting your respectable feedback.

  • 3 年 之前
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  fashionplate

  • 3 年 之前

  HI! Do look up my new entry at #49. I have tweaked it to a more conversational tone. Hope you like it.

  • 3 年 之前
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  musicworld1775

  • 3 年 之前

  #42 check it

  • 3 年 之前
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  A600DC

  • 3 年 之前

  #45 is my entry, please take a look and share your feedback. Thanks a lot and cheers!

  • 3 年 之前
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  Suryasugano6

  • 3 年 之前

  Mam,I will submitting my article within next 24 hours,Thank you.

  • 3 年 之前
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  mdrasulhossain08

  • 3 年 之前

  It's really a great moment for me that i read a nice concept story.
  I tried to give it a mystery touch and so I think that You will like it.

  • 3 年 之前
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  adilalam132

  • 3 年 之前

  I have uploaded my entry #10. Awaiting your feedback.

  • 3 年 之前
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  mhdbasha

  • 3 年 之前

  Hello my entry is on #25, Its not perfect as there are things to be adressed. Please leave a feedback so i can work on it or get back to me.

  • 3 年 之前
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  Asmira11

  • 3 年 之前

  Hi there, I have submitted my entry in which #12 . Enjoy your reading!

  • 3 年 之前
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  adilalam132

  • 3 年 之前

  Hello Contest Holder, what kind of language are you looking for, should the English be simplistic or advanced yet easy to comprehend for the average viewer?

  • 3 年 之前

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