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  Laowaiman2009

  • 6 年 之前

  ... The worst mistake -- because it shows a serious lack of attention to detail -- is the poorly formatted bulleted list at the end. Potential customers reading the ad are going to wonder why the company couldn't come up with something better than this. I am a native speaker who writes copy for a content business. I'll write the ad exactly the way you want for £5 on Freelancer. Please PM me if you are interested.

  • 6 年 之前
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     priya96411

     • 6 年 之前

     Oh dear me! I must admit, this is the first time someone (who isn't a client) has taken the effort to go through my entry in such detail to criticise. I'm quite flattered, actually. :)
     However, I must raise an objection to your mention of my English. I am not a native speaker of English - and neither, I assume, are many people in the CH's target audience. You see what I'm trying to say here? Perfect, academic-level English != better content

     • 6 年 之前
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  Laowaiman2009

  • 6 年 之前

  Dear Contest Holder -- The winning entry is detailed but full of mistakes. The idiom "patience of a saint" shouldn't be in a business ad. It has been a long time since saints were universally respected as symbols of spotless morality in the U.K. The expression will annoy some and be offensive to others. There's also a redundant sentence (see: "Lie back and relax as we take care of the mess."), and some bad grammar (see: "With massive experience of working at luxury hotels..."). It reads like a piece of copy written by someone who learned English as a second language and tried really hard to be professional but couldn't pull it off.

  • 6 年 之前
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  Laowaiman2009

  • 6 年 之前

  Hello Contest Holder -- I have a question about Avic's hiring practices. Does Avic employ vetting -- background checks -- when hiring? Thank you :)

  • 6 年 之前
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  abujafar75

  • 6 年 之前

  I have given you a demo. If you choose me I will write a new one for you.

  • 6 年 之前
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  maureendass

  • 6 年 之前

  Hello CH can you please check the link you provided? Somehow I keep getting an Indonesian site, Maureen.

  • 6 年 之前
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     竞赛主办者

     • 6 年 之前

     My apologies, I made a mistake, please check this link https://www.facebook.com/avicdcs/

     • 6 年 之前
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  talhasfl

  • 6 年 之前

  Thanks for your response.. I've uploaded a simple demo again check it out now.

  • 6 年 之前
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  talhasfl

  • 6 年 之前

  kindly explain more? you need advertise banner or posters?

  • 6 年 之前
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     竞赛主办者

     • 6 年 之前

     HI Talha, thank you for entering the contest. I need advertisement (text) itself which would describe the company, would be creative and eye catching also wouldn't be too long. The text would be used to represent us as a company on future advertising and used on the leaflets. Thank you, hope it made it more clear.

     • 6 年 之前

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